What are the shortcomings of Master Mo Dao and God bless the people?
But the author dug too shallow, and the shortcomings are in my opinion:
First, dialogue between characters. From time to time, there is a feeling of salivating when Weibo comments, or the feeling of chatting with girlfriends and lovers on WeChat. Even in the tense moment of confrontation with the big boss, the big boss had the wind of spitting, and all the employees vomited ... it was really uncomfortable. This discomfort is not because there is no bitter sense of drama, but because it is inappropriate and unobtrusive.
Second, the scene fluency. In the scene where many people are standing, the perspective is always fixed on two people. The two men chatted for a long time, while the others acted as background boards. Without transition, a person in the background board began to speak. This feeling is like frame by frame, which is more uncomfortable.
Third, skills. It is not difficult to find that the author likes to describe the truth in narrative, which is good, but after describing the truth, he likes to be reasonable. The key point is that this truth is not well spoken, or there is not enough blank space, just like a small video made by some netizens. After the video ended, the screen turned black, and the white words of the author's life sentiment appeared on the shady scene. Many places are suitable for choosing a role, using this role to reveal the truth, let the truth surface, but leave it to readers to think.
Fourth, more thunder and less rain. It was really good when it was spread out. I want to know about family disputes and my past life. But the second half is also ... simple? The main line is looking for the body, and the next stop is switched. The victory is too simple, and the black hand behind the scenes will be broken with a poke. Let's just say that the people in the protagonist camp have their own personalities, but the people in the protagonist's opposing camp are really the same-ignorant people.
Fifth, the meat outside the fans has really decreased ... After reading it, I learned through the full text that Sun Wei Jr. had no envy and forbearance, and Lan Zhan became an inexplicable large-scale shooting scene. This is obviously not a lovely place between them, especially through the author's description of meat, I even began to doubt their love. Every beginning begins with provocation, not with emotion. It's like telling me that Lan Zhan has only been abstinent for many years and has never been provoked, so he has a desire to vent on the igniter. It's not love, it's not love, there are all kinds of dust from the past, and I'm confused when I see it here. For me, this last description has an indescribable feeling, but it's not very good anyway … and it's the kind of person who does it without kissing.
But I can write like this, and fans will love it.