8th grade Volume I Unit 1 Composition Teaching Plan
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She smiled, so sweet. She gave her purse to the teacher, who praised her in front of the class. She found a wallet on campus.
These are three sentences out of order. According to our understanding, it should obviously be reordered, and the order is: she found a wallet on campus. She gave her purse to the teacher, who praised her in front of the class. She smiled, so sweet.
These three sentences just explain the cause, process and result of a thing. Obviously, as long as we explain the cause, process and result of a thing clearly, we can understand it clearly. "Write clearly the cause, process and result of a thing" is to train the integrity and organization of narrative. Goethe once said: "As long as a person can make one thing clear, he can also make many things clear." It can be seen that writing one thing clearly is the basis of writing complex narratives. It is difficult to persuade people to write a thing without explaining the time and place where it happened; If you don't understand why things happen, you can't write them; Without writing clearly what happened, the structure is incomplete; If the result of the event is not explained, the reader will be confused. Therefore, only when the elements of the event are complete, the focus is clear, and the level is clear, can we leave a complete and profound impression on readers.
But students often make the following mistakes when writing a clear composition.
First, the location and time of the incident were not clearly explained; I didn't write the story clearly. One thing can never be separated from six aspects: time, place, people, things, cause and effect. Therefore, only by writing these aspects clearly can others understand what you have written.
However, the explanation of these six aspects should not be rigid, but should be flexibly mastered according to the needs of the article. Time and place don't have to be pointed out directly, but sometimes they can be expressed indirectly by describing the characteristics and changes of natural scenery. For example, "the cock crows" means that it will be dawn soon; "The sun is about to set in the west", which means at night, and so on.
Second, things are not written in detail and the key points are not prominent enough. In the six aspects of narrative, the cause, process and result are the most important links. If you want to write things clearly, you should write the cause, process and result of things in the narrative, especially the process of things, leaving a complete and profound impression on people.
Third, the narrative is not clear enough. Everything has a process of occurrence, development and result, and some students can't describe a thing in the order of development, which leads to unclear organization of the article.
The content of this lesson is Unit 1 "Long March Songs", the first volume of 8th grade Chinese textbook published by Jiangsu Education Publishing House. Part 2: Writing-clearly writing the cause, process and result of a thing. It belongs to the training of narrative writing and is the basis of other stylistic writing. Narrative writing can be divided into three types: writing people, keeping notes and describing things clearly are the basis of narrative writing. Therefore, we should pay attention to arranging this course as the opening of the eighth grade writing class. So how can middle school students avoid these common mistakes in writing and write one thing clearly?
First of all, let me talk about the cause. Reason is the basis of events and the source of logic. For example, when a classmate wrote about his first wheat harvest, he said at the beginning that this year is another bumper harvest year, and the wheat waves are surging, which is very gratifying. But the weather forecast said there would be a rainstorm in three days, so "I" also went to grab wheat. Next, the process of wheat harvest is described: because of the first wheat harvest, "I" was exhausted, but it was still slow and poor, and it was a mess ... At the beginning of this article, the cause of the incident was revealed and the "wheat harvest" incident was placed at the moment of "grabbing the harvest". We often say "logical" and explain why things happen, so that the following can be "logical". It should be emphasized that the cause of the incident is not equal to the beginning of the article, so you must pay attention when writing.
Second, the story of the event should be specific, and it should describe vivid and specific details in life and a person's true feelings, not just generalities. The so-called concreteness is to portray the touching and emotional parts of the incident in detail, spread the climax of the matter, and let readers feel immersive. When learning the text Grass, you must be most moved by Vice President Zhou's talk about "eating grass": "You should thank them, and thank these comrades for their life and health for the experience of the whole army. Remember these grasses, too! After taking a breath, he continued ... "For example, a classmate wrote that he cleaned the storage room, and the first draft did it without any description. There is only one sentence to write about the situation when I first entered the storage room: "the storage room is big, dirty and messy, and I really don't want to do it." "Later, inspired by the teacher, she expanded this sentence into the following paragraph:" This storage room is big, dirty and messy. As soon as I entered the door, there was a strange smell in my mind. I want to turn around and leave ... "The revised text is more specific, richer and more realistic than the original text.
Three, a complete narrative of a thing, the beginning and the end, people can grasp the whole picture of the thing, and then correctly understand the ideological significance of this thing. The result of an event usually contains a topic. For example, in the above example, when wheat is harvested, it can be described as "Longkou grabbing food". This result can develop such a theme: my family's farming has achieved a bumper harvest, I have experienced the hardships of labor in detail, and my life has also achieved a small harvest. Therefore, effectively describing the results of events often helps to highlight the theme.
In short, to write a thing clearly, we must describe the cause, process and result of it clearly, especially the process of it clearly.
So, how to write a wonderful article?
First of all, we must have a sense of structure. We can't always think about getting things done in one breath. What we should consider is the reader, that is, the feeling of the marking teacher reading your composition. The article should have a train of thought, first-then-then, there is such a clue, according to the principle of at least three paragraphs in the middle part, it is convenient to write and easy to read.
Second, clearly write what happened is not an end, but a means to express the center, and learn to use events skillfully. The narrative structure can be changed through flashback; Interpolation can enrich the content of the article; Can create suspense and fun; You can add events with twists and turns, faltering. With these writing methods, we can learn the story structure with characteristics and individuality through the texts we have learned and the articles of modern literature we read after class, and master the narrative "one track mind" through the structure, so we should plan it well before writing.
Third, a good language should try to write it as an event. The development process of the event can be stopped, and it can be described by looking at the people and things around the event. Describing the environment can render the mood of the characters. Describing people around you can set off the image of the protagonist. You can also think about it, isn't this psychological description? It can not only express the characters, but also highlight the center. If you concentrate on describing the process of things, you will forget all these methods. You must learn to stop, think and write in words, so as not to find that you only wrote the story and didn't pay attention to the language problem.
Fourth, when selecting materials, we should pay attention to the material of a thing. It should be bigger, that is, you can write after you finish writing, which will not make people feel procrastinating and nagging, especially not too long. The central process of the event should be written out.
Finally, we should also consider the issue of transition. Some students always feel this way in their writing. If they think along the course of things, they can't catch up when they stop. It doesn't really matter. In the narrative process of events, there is no need to explain everything in detail, and there can be jumps. As long as the transition is completed, it will naturally come to the later link.
Generally speaking, writing a composition about an event also needs to be central, structured, well-spoken and attractive, and can never be satisfied with explaining the event clearly.
Summary: Narration in narrative means that the narrative can be clear and complete and the details are appropriate; Description can be concrete and vivid, which is also the basic requirement for writing narrative. Describing the experience of characters and the process of development and change of things is narrative. The narrative requires clear clues, clear explanations and appropriate details. Describing the state of a character or scene in vivid language is called description. The description should be concrete and vivid, so that the reader can feel immersive.
Specifically, we can start from the following aspects:
(1) Divide the "after" part into several steps and write them in a certain order.
(flashback, insertion, supplementary narrative, sequence)
(2) Write clearly the important plots and scenes in "passing by", giving people the feeling of passing by and seeing their things. (detailed and slightly appropriate)
(3) The performances of the main characters should be clearly written, so as to achieve the effect of listening to people. (Pay attention to the description of characters' language, movements, psychology, demeanor and other details)
(4) Pay attention to the names in the narrative: first person, second person and third person.
Fourth, guided learning and training: consolidate the extension and induce in-depth guidance.
Writing instruction
[Training topic] Write a narrative on the topic of "My Story".
Requirements: (1) The plot should be attractive.
(2) The cause, process and result of the incident should be clearly written.
[Method refers to Tianjin]:
1. Students can speak freely and talk about their own understanding or ideas according to the training topics.
2. Teachers combine students' speeches to solve problems:
Is to write a story, the protagonist of the story is "I". When writing this article, we should pay attention to the characteristics of the story-the story pays attention to the plot and should be written in twists and turns; The language of the story is close to spoken language, so it should be popular, friendly and natural.
Learning method guidance
The combination of independent writing and comprehensive inquiry.
Narrative composition is the foundation, and three paragraphs should be remembered. There are three narrative methods, direct flashback and insertion.
It is easy to learn to record events in chronological order, the cause, process and result of things; Explain the four elements at the beginning, time, place and people;
The cause of the incident is clear and detailed; The account is closed, so simply write the beginning and the end.
There are many changes in flashback methods, and the promotion result is a coup; The beginning accelerates change, and the end takes care of many benefits.
Tell specific things in the middle, and the details should be interesting; The transition reference is tight, and clear clues are the most important.
The selection of materials should be new, and the words should be true; Few words but good, few things but new.
An article has a theme, and a series of examples are not off topic; Clear, clear, detailed and clear.
[Fragment Training] Students can write an incident that happened in their own life in 5 minutes. They can choose a piece of composition that describes the cause or result of the incident and ask for a clear, definite and complete description. The teacher checks and reads aloud.
[write an outline]
Guide the students to determine the main content of the article, write the outline of my story, and talk at the same table.
1. Expand memories and trace back to the past, for example, you can write your feelings at the beginning.
2. Describe an unforgettable event that happened to you.
3. Talk about some feelings, express feelings and point out the main idea.
List of alternative materials:
(1) Me and my family-in the family, the story happened between me and my relatives.
(2) On the way to school-learning stories that happened between me and my teachers and classmates in my life.
(3) Walking and watching-a story that happened between me and strangers in society.
[Transcription of ideas]: Stick to the main idea, simplify the complex, keep the paper clean and tidy, and save time.
Reason: concise and clear.
Narrative story: detailed and vivid
Results: Natural and reasonable.