Why don't you fight for "an empty mountain after rain stands on an autumn night"?

I can only say that the questioner is very insightful and has a great personality. Reading poetry is the keynote of the whole poem, not the emotion. The antithesis of sentences does not affect the emotional expression of poetry very much, so don't be too entangled. If you have to say yes, I think you have changed the word very well, but the artistic conception is different.