There are a few words I want to vomit after reading Zhu Xian's original works.

Zhu Xian saw it about 10 years ago, and no slot was found at that time. Now I'm listening to audio novels, and after listening to a small part, I found some slots: mainly about Qingyun competition.

1. In the original book, there is no round limit or time limit for the Qingyun Competition. The game can't be over unless one of the two sides dies. If the strength of both sides is close to the combat effectiveness and particularly tenacious, it is entirely possible that both sides will lose, and both sides will lose! There are 64 battle sites in the original book. If the game is full, in theory, it will take 63 games. Both sides of the game are enthusiastic disciples, and they are also holding the big sword killer. 64 people were injured in 63 games, and 10-20 people were killed, which is completely normal. However, the original does not describe death, which is obviously abnormal.

2. As an antagonistic competition, it is only held once every 60 years in the original book. Not to mention whether this time is too long, it is said that preparing for the game is actually individual training, and there is no confrontational training! The author is obviously too literary, which is also the fundamental reason why China Wushu can't beat western free fighting.

3. The original works actually don't know what Fairbury is, that is, fair competition. Zhang Xiaofan's first rookie cheated all the way into the quarter-finals with top weapons, just like I hold a pistol, you hold a stone, I hold a sharp knife and you hold a broom.

To sum up, the original author Zhu Xian is a samadhi.

So how should the original be written? Here is an example:

In order to prepare for the upcoming Qingyun competition, eight disciples of the Great Everest are nervously conducting one-on-one confrontation training every day, and draw lots every morning to decide today's confrontation training partners. At the same time, Tian Buyi spent all the money that Qingyun Gate gave to the Great Everest on buying the most advanced automatic flying sword throwing machine, which was used to train his disciples' ability to resist blows and avoid flying swords. Su Shi Niang led her disciples to do strength training such as squat and bench press. If she goes down the mountain, she will lose the bet. She recruited a group of hooligans from the foot of the mountain as sparring partners of other disciples, and trained in groups when nothing happened.

For the fairness of this competition, new competition rules have been formulated, with the chairman of the competition Committee of Cangsong Taoist Temple and Dao Xuan as the vice chairman of the competition Committee. In view of the mortality rate of 20% in previous competitions, and in order to prevent some novices from taking advantage of top flying swords, it is forbidden to use any metal magic weapon in this competition, but all mops sold in a wholesale market are used as standard flying swords. The unified wooden flying sword not only ensures the safety of the contestants, but also ensures certain injuries. In addition, there are uniform regulations on the dress of the contestants in this competition.

The game has started. First of all, the chairman of the competition Committee, Mr. Qingsong, spoke (applause ...)

Next is the speech of the person in charge of preaching (applause ...)

Then, a group of young dancers recruited by Qingyunmen from Heyangcheng took the stage and warmed up with cheerleaders.

Let's start the game. The first game is Zhang Xiaofan versus Lin Jingyu. The rules of the game are 5 minutes per round, and one round is 7 * * *. If one side is ko, the other side wins. If no one is ko at the end of the game, the winner is judged by the number of flying sword hits, with 3 hits on the head, 2 hits on the trunk and 1 point on the limbs. You are not allowed to poke your crotch, otherwise you will be given a yellow card warning for the first time and sent off for the second time.

On the basis of avoiding suspicion, the head of the Seven Schools of Qingyun served as the referee, and the referee of this game was Shang.

Then there are players from both sides. Dressing the, a member of both teams, only wore vest shorts and bare feet. The player wearing red vest shorts on the court is Zhang Xiaofan ... and the player wearing blue competition suit is Lin Jingyu. ...

At the end of the game, the two sides played seven rounds, and no one was hit by ko and Zhang Xiaofan's flying swords seven times in the head, eight times in the trunk and five times in the limbs. * * * calculate how many points, how many times did Lin Jingyu's fly sword hit the other side. Finally, Zhang Xiaofan won. ...

In order to improve the fighting capacity of disciples, the Qingyun Sect Congress is held every four years, and the number of places for the next competition is decided according to the competition results. Dazhu Peak was weak, and finally 2.5 places were saved. The preliminaries will be held one year before each congress, and the third place will compete with the eighth place in Longshoufeng for 0.5 places. In order to maximize the competition results, normal training must strictly simulate the competition environment, such as the flying sword used in the competition. All factions bought a large number of mops of the same model for training. For example, Sister Lu, in order to avoid menstrual pain affecting her performance, took menstruation-regulating drugs before the game. Results The leader of Cangsong bought the most advanced equipment and didn't test the poison. He caught Lu Xueqi's classmates taking illegal drugs in one fell swoop and was fined 100! Ceng Shushu was found forbidden to eat barbecue down the mountain. Zhang Xiaofan secretly used a fire stick for blood supplement, and stopped using it before the game. He was lucky every time. Then one day, Taoist Cangsong came to Mount Everest for a urine test and ordered Zhang Xiaofan to pee! Tian Linger, pee! Results The flying urine test found that Zhang Xiaofan's erythropoietin exceeded the standard, and he was banned for life!

Later, the game rules of Qingyun Gate became the unified rules of the fix-true world. Because the temple in Yin Tian is full of monks and no women, we finally chose the way of the ancient Olympic Games, and the contestants participated naked! Later, some women in Beijing spent a lot of money to sponsor the Yin Tian Temple Fair and were allowed to enter the stadium to watch the game. When the winners stand naked on the podium, the ladies will often see the longing for love, and many winners are immediately recruited as bodyguards by the ladies. After that, the recruits will understand what will happen.