Sweat composition: Who knows the taste of water?
Jiangsu province Yancheng Funing high school
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Read the following materials and write an article of not less than 800 words as required.
At noon in the scorching sun, farmers are busy farming and sweating like rain. Water is a precious thing for them.
When a shepherd comes down from the mountain and is thirsty, if he can lie down by the river and drink a big glass, he is the one who knows the sweetness of water best.
However, another person, although he is sitting in an armchair in the shade of a tree, with a beautiful kettle and a few delicate cups beside him, still can't taste the sweetness of the water.
(Excerpted from Life in Erffa, Afghanistan)
It is required to choose a good angle, define the concept, clarify the style and draw up a good title; Don't deviate from the content and meaning of the material, don't copy it, and don't copy it.
Notes on the title or background of a book.
There are three paragraphs in the material. The first paragraph says that farmers who plow fields really understand the value of water, the second paragraph says that herders who graze can really taste the sweetness of water, and the third paragraph says that idle people who enjoy the success can't taste the sweetness of water. The third paragraph is in sharp contrast with the first and second paragraphs. The practical significance of this material is closely related to China's old saying that "three generations are not rich" (one generation starts a business, the second generation stays in business, and the third generation fails). The note "Life from Afghan Ulfat" reminds us that the key to writing this article is to reveal the logical internal relationship between experiencing the hardships of "farming" and "grazing" and understanding the preciousness and sweetness of water. Therefore, the topic of this composition is a binary relationship. Only by revealing the internal relationship of duality can our composition be "from the outside to the inside". Otherwise, no matter how bitter your life is and how sweet your water is, it is superficial and isolated. This will also be an important yardstick for judging your composition conception and skills. If you can only "perceive" the preciousness of water, it means that you are still at the first level; If you can still "feel" the sweetness of the water, it means that you have been promoted to the second level; If you "realize" why water is so precious and sweet, it means that you have sublimated to the third level. Because the first two levels are still in the stage of "knowing why", the third level has reached the stage of "knowing why". If you want to make the article brilliant, you must first think clearly, straighten it out and write this "why" thoroughly, so it should be the "focus" of this article. In this sense, this essay can not only guide middle school students to "pay attention to life, life and reality", but also inspire them to "think about life, life and reality" in depth.
Sweet sweat
Du Tiantian from Funing Middle School in Jiangsu Province
At noon in midsummer, the sun scorched the earth, and my father in the wheat field was sweating. My father said that sweat tastes sweet.
The harvest season is coming to an end, others have already harvested the wheat with the harvester, and our wheat is still standing in the field. I once asked my father why we didn't use the harvester. My father replied firmly, anyway, the harvester is a waste of food. This is the result of my efforts for several months. How can it be wasted? I am speechless.
I abandoned school and went home the other day because I couldn't stand the pain of going to school. My mother was paralyzed in bed because of a car accident, nagging and crying for days. Father didn't say anything, but asked me to go to the fields with him.
My father brought me a sickle and taught me how to cut wheat. In the scorching sun, I kept bending down and getting up, and soon I felt tired and thirsty. Just about to rest on the ridge, my father, who was only immersed in the front and waving a sickle, suddenly stood up and exclaimed, "Come back! I'm tired after cutting for a while. Will this wheat field be cut until the Year of the Monkey? ! "I had to turn around and continue to repeat the numbness of my limbs, and the hot sun overhead slowly moved forward.
I don't know how long it took. My father's wheat has been cut. He sat on the ground and drank the cold boiled water from the teapot. I glanced at him from time to time, but he didn't mean to stop me. At this time, my whole body seemed to be caught in the rain. Sweat kept dripping from the tip of my hair, and the sweat on my forehead rolled into my eyes, which hurt terribly. Finally, I cut my wheat, picked up the teapot and poured it into my mouth. I didn't care if the sweat rolled into the teapot, but to my surprise, the water dripping with sweat tasted so sweet.
After drinking water, I suddenly collapsed to the ground and my limbs were numb. I just want to lie there and let the sun shine and sweat drip from my hair. The sweat from the tip of the nose slipped to the tip of your mouth, and when you lick it with the tip of your tongue, the sweat is no longer bitter, but has a little sweetness of spring water.
My father came up to me and sat down without saying a word. He looked at his wheat and his lips were curved, but I also saw the loss in his eyes. I know he can't bear to leave his wheat without a harvester, but he can't get a grain of wheat anyway.
I got up from the ground and walked to my father. I knelt on the ground with hard stubble and sobbed, "I have to go to school." I want to harvest my own wheat field with sweat. "
Sweat is bitter, but as long as you pay, it will become sweet. This is life.
Comments on outstanding works
Swinging a sickle in the wheat field is a man's conversation. Father is not angry and arrogant, and the wheat he cuts is worth a thousand words. He taught me that only those who can shed their own sweat and drink their own "water" are real men, and those who can endure all pains and turn bitter sweat into sweet springs are real men! From abandoning school to resuming school, the plot took a sharp turn for the worse, but the personal experience of numbness of limbs due to backache and the real feeling of sweat rolling into eyes and slipping into mouth are both unexpected and more reasonable. The enlightenment of this paper is that from the narrative point of view, examples can not only promote the development of the plot, but also be more convincing than words and deeds.
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The sweetness of water is not known until it is bitter.
Lv Yunli of Funing Middle School in Jiangsu Province
At that moment, I knew that water was sweet.
People who have been to Jokhang Temple tell me that Jokhang Temple is boring. Only some dilapidated temples, like thousands of other temples, have several Buddha statues. Monks read boring classics all day.
But with awe, I made an appointment with a friend to have a look.
Driving from Lijiang, Yunnan, along the 2 14 national highway to the north, in the distance, there are snow peaks soaring into the sky, and the most flawless white clouds are floating in the bluest sky overhead. Awe and piety came into being.
Soon after driving, I saw a group of people on the side of the road. They took one step at a time, then knelt down and kowtowed three times. I was curious, so I asked my friend what it was. My friend said it was a pilgrim, which I have heard before; But I have never seen it with my own eyes. The respect in my heart rises slowly, and I can't help but want to move forward with them.
"Put me down, I want to go with them."
"You're crazy! This is not a joke. "
"Who said it was a joke?" My friend couldn't beat me and agreed, but told me that the car would follow, so I couldn't hold on to the car.
I went up to Iggy and said, "Let me join you!" Eji raised his head and looked at me with pious eyes. He was speechless and only nodded his head. I'll follow, take a step, kneel down, it hurts! The gravel on the road bit his knee, his palm touched the ground, and he felt a needle-like pain. He regretted it several times in a row. Get in the car? My friends will laugh at me. Go on, I don't think I can hold on any longer. In the chaos, I caught a glimpse of the pilgrims' bright red knees. It's blood, yes! I firmly believe I can't give up!
An hour later, my hands turned red and bloodshot, and my knees were like rusty bearings, which made it very painful to rotate. The most generous sunshine shines on the most pious people, and my sweat slides across my face, dripping on the blood of my predecessors, and transpiration instantly, like a auspicious cloud.
In the afternoon, the power of the sun is still unabated. My mouth is dry, my tongue is like rough sandpaper and I feel suffocated. Sweat overflows on my body and binds me like a huge cocoon. The friend ran down and asked, "Do you want some water?" I hesitated, but finally refused. During pitching, I saw the top of the Jokhang Temple stupa shining, and after a burst of excitement, the pace was faster.
I came to Jokhang Temple and stood up with the help of my friends. My friend handed me a kettle, and I shook my head: "Come to Jokhang Temple and drink the water from Jokhang Temple." The friend hesitated for a moment, then nodded.
We each took a handful of water and drank it. The water flowed down my throat, like a precious spring water, cool and sweet, as if it had opened seven orifices, opened my heart, and suddenly became Zen. The friend took a sip and vomited: "It's too bitter!" "How sweet!" We looked at each other and then smiled.
I know, and so do my friends: you and I are both water, which is a piece of water. Only when you are bitter do you know the sweetness of water, and the water that comforts you is not sweet.
The dental column was full of pilgrims' teeth, so I took a handful of water and spilled it. My friend smiled, and so did I.
At night, when I fall asleep with the bell, there is still water in my mouth.
Comments on outstanding works
Now there is a hot word called "happiness", but "feeling" is something that can't be seen or touched. The beauty of this paper is that it is so real and emotional. For this reason, this paper gives birth to four feelings: "I" got off the bus and knelt down because of the infection of pilgrims, "felt" the hardships paid by pilgrims for tasting, "felt" the sweetness of temple water because of hardships, and "experienced" the sweetness of temple water-suffering and bitter water. Not suffering is "blessing" and "not knowing happiness". The four senses are only the author's Xiao Zhi, and the author's great wisdom lies in a contest between "I" and friends, and a game between "spiritual abundance" and "material abundance". Although the author has not made a final judgment, the competition between "drinking temple water" is clear. This pushes the theme of the full text to a steep height-the "bitterness" of the body is not "true bitterness", but the "sweetness" of the spirit is "true sweetness". It is precisely because of the author's "great wisdom" that the theme of this article, though heavy, gives readers an ethereal and light feeling that "the canoe has crossed Chung Shan Man".
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Harvest sweetness with sweat
Yuan from Funing Middle School in Jiangsu Province
Only through hard work can we know the sweetness of water; Only after sweating will your heart be happy; After a bitter cold, you can smell plum blossoms.
If you want to taste the sweetness of life, you must exchange it with the hardest work.
Nowadays, too many people are content with pleasure and unwilling to struggle. Li Shuangjiang's son, Li Tianyi, has a rich life that ordinary people can't have. He has parents who can do everything for him and satisfy him. However, instead of bringing him real happiness, all this sent him to a point of no return when he could not fill his empty spirit. Just imagine, if everything he has is bought by his own efforts, will he still not cherish, be dissatisfied and be unhappy?
If you don't want to live a comfortable life in the shade, you can't know the sweetness of water; Without the shelter of the greenhouse, we can't understand the wonderful life outside; If you can't lift your sweaty arms, you will never feel the joy of success!
Yuan Longping can laugh so happily because there is his life's hard work in the paddy field behind him. Shi Tiesheng can stay happy because he has a process of overcoming illness in his writing. Socrates asked young people who came to look for happiness to build ships in order to let them know that happiness comes from labor. After 49 days of joint efforts, the young man finally built a boat. They swam happily in the water and sang loudly.
No pains, no gains. You reap not only food, but also sweet water and endless happiness.
Li Yanhong, president of Baidu, put forward "calling the wolf and refusing comfort" in the company. He asked employees to work tirelessly like wolves, refusing the comfortable life of sitting in the shade and drinking tea to make life more meaningful. Now many young people, like Li Tianyi and the man sitting in the shade drinking tea, are hiding under the protection of their parents, unwilling to drift north, unwilling to live in humble abode and afraid to travel. They are gnawing at the old, but they still feel that the food is not fragrant, the home is not warm, and the water is not fragrant. People who always want to get something for nothing, when will you understand that only sweat can harvest sweetness and only work can harvest happiness?
If you want to taste the sweetness of water, please take action, because your sweat will tell you how sweet the water is; If you want to know the happiness of life, please act, because your efforts will tell you how happy life is. Jason wrote in My Four Seasons: "I have loved, hated, laughed, cried, tasted and understood ... If you think about it carefully, you will know that there are more sunny days than rainy days, and more gains than work. As long as I live seriously and pay with a clear conscience. People will have no right to laugh at me as a fool who can't make ends meet, and they don't have to use his yardstick to measure whether I am worth it. "
As long as you are willing to pay with a clear conscience, then the sweat you shed will definitely be exchanged for the sweetness of water.
Comments on outstanding works
This article is an argumentative paper, divided into argument one: "If you want to taste the sweetness of life, you must exchange it with the hardest work". Sub-argument 2 "No pains, no gains. You reap not only food, but also sweet water and endless happiness. In the interactive debate, the causal relationship between "bitterness of sweat" and "sweetness of water" was thoroughly revealed. The argumentation skills of this paper are also reflected in the germination after the example. " "If you don't want to live a comfortable life in the shade, you will never feel the joy of success" and "If you want to know the sweetness of water, I will tell you how happy life is", which not only reveals the truth in the example to the fullest, but also extends the truth from one case to another, making the revealed truth very universal. This article enlightens us that the bull's nose in argumentative writing is "reason". If you want to catch this bull's nose, you must think through and speak through.
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